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suicide
Ever wonder why life deals you the worst possible hand?
In a room full of seats, you're left to stand.
Trying to grasp on to life but you fall behind,
all crazy things keep on running through your mind.
Feeling suicidal reaching out for hope,
Keep hearing you're a loser and you're learning how to cope.
Walking down a road but don't know where to turn,
crowds of people by a flame and you're the only one to burn.
Screaming out for help and no one hears your call,
trying to stand up, but you just continue to fall.
Slowly urging the pain to just go away,
crying for it to just go but it continues to stay.
Keep on feeling confused and trying to understand why,
you know you're alive but you wish you would die.
Can't seem to understand the things that keep happening to you,
wanting only an explanation for the things you do.
You feel like running away but you can't seem to move,
you keep giving yourself reasons to live
but there's nothing more to prove.
Lacking any self respect you ever had,
wanting so much to understand but blocked by your inner self.
Thinking of death and wishing you would die,
saying hello to the world when you really want to say bye.
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Re-opened. I'll comment on it later.
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nice drop as usual baby girl but topic is played out,you shouldnt be depressed life always deal more than one hand they just come at different junctions in ones life.keep ya head up and look forward to tomorrow.peace out boo.
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I thought it was dope...yes a bit on the "played/depressed" tip but I mean what else does the world have to offer? I'm feeling this....keep your head up and your ways to bad feelings down...
Ya dig?
Out
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A quite straight rythmic piece that at times dived deeper. Like someone who's going at 'it' so simply, but cannot help digging a bit deeper to find the meaning. And yet that has the tendency to push one further into depresssion n what not...
...nice piece.
..resp..
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was an good peice bit played but i did one on this topic before too
deep thougts were put in this peice it seemd
QUOTE"Slowly urging the pain to just go away,
crying for it to just go but it continues to stay.
Keep on feeling confused and trying to understand why,
you know you're alive but you wish you would die.
Can't seem to understand the things that keep happening to you,
wanting only an explanation for the things you do.
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that there was really deep lots of emnotions which is always good
if there was maybe one thing to make the next peice better would be to pick a topic that aint as played had good techinque in doing this peice and was vey foward and ryhing was there but yet poetry aint always bout ryhmin
8/10 nice job much respect to fellow poets