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I've exposed ya concept recycle/biting & it's sad sir, I had to
& those tactics will leave u broke, Un...like ya jaw after this battle
Cool concept but the set up was terrible, IMO. How can tactics leave him broke/broken? See what I mean. I think you could have tied more of a relevant set up with your concept. It would've helped this bar land a little more effectively.
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I make gun shots a tasteful art, something U have to see
Wen I glue ten in ya gut U'll leak out more shit, than that food allergy
Again, your setups man. This could have landed A LOT harder, had you set it up correctly. Not sure how you go from talking about guns to "Gluing ten" Why would bullets need to be glued? You see where I'm going. Bars making no type of sense which is unfortunate because it's a good play on words/concept.
Dawg u know I'm a star, in this game I spit crack
racist? No...
But still wouldnt think this Dark Matter if he changed his name to Tic Tac
This was bad lol. What were you thinking & why?
ur an aweful showing, performance been on sum fake "Act a threat"
I'll ring down a curtain in this one...On ya head ta snap ya neck
This was a little better, as far as the set up being tied in some what with the concept but your wording AND execution was extremely lazy here.
The punches I speak be like a loaded shotty that I'll break out n shoot
Lately we don't see any Real $pit wen u talk...since he slapped the taste out'a u
Decent personal. Nothing too hard and/or heavy hitting but a jab at most. My only issue with this bar is the concept as a whole has been done a million times. It's just a go too quick filler bar/personal people use. Not going to hold the fact that the concept is played against you, tho.
Hate this kid. Snipe shooter wit the small iron be blazing him
If my point is well taken? It's hallowed lead & a 1shot kill through ya cranium
This one is kind of on the same boat as the bar prior.
Ya bitch bout belt holders, & after this she won't abide ur loyal treatment
But i'll hear "Noq's @ the door" After this, wen ya girl shows up to clean my royal penis
You could have did more with this concept. Had potential to be a heavy hitter but the execution was lazy.
& I beat that hoes cunt, while u make her let out a rappish, fret screams
u ever mentioned wit MUFF Destroyer? It's prob chop'n those fags concepts that u take from Netcees
Didn't like this/lazy filler bar.
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I thought I taught u a lesson, U ain't improve nothin.
Our last battle was a wake up call & this is the lifetime snooze button.
Had potential but your execution was corny to me. Life time snooze button? SMH... Co'mon playa.
Doggystyle & Missionary comes to mind when a skeezer pass',
I bet this Gaylords favorite Position is being the CEO's secret fag.
A lot going on here. I see your concept but once again, your execution was lazy/corny. Some times being too complex can hinder the impact, my man. This is one of those cases.
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I'll do dawg vicisious, Ginsu to the throat he'll be on floor spittin;
Up blood after I cut his 'Juggler' quick as a bad Circus audition.
Ehhhh, not sure how I feel about this one, tbh. I kinda like it but don't at the same time. Concept was cool and some what creative, but I think I'm not liking it at the same time because the wording is really choppy.
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Dude thinks he's in rare form?, Fuck the tone in his grammar,
Him being in his Prime'll mean he's the farthest thing from goin BANANAS!
This was ok, I liked it.
Chicks won't smooch on this goblin!, that's word to me, Buddy.
Girls don't consider this 'Imp peck'able' but they do say he's Perfectly ugly.
End rhymes were awkward as fuck. Bar as a whole was bad, IMO. I like your creative attempts, but majority of the time your wording butchers the concept, bro. If you could just clean up your wording, your creativity will outshine the majority of this forum, my man.
I was apart of a 'Flash Mob' We had fun and danced in public,
Kill once 'Flashed Mobs' w/ his penis & over went lots of damage from it.
SMH, not good.
If Raps was wounds, Mines read like a wide gash.
Lookin at his u 'Read scratch', Like robbing bank $ w/ a dye pack.
What?
he ain't ready for text scene, I'm the best seen.
& this verse'll leave his ass shooken enough to be a twerkers wet dream.
Basic and old concept but ok.
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OVERALL: Very close battle. Hard to pick a winner after the 1st read. Had to read it a couple of times in order to determine a winner. Ok, so let me just say this; I am not impressed AT ALL by either verse in fact, I've seen both of these dudes come a lot harder then this. I was actually disappointed and expected more, considering the potential both of these dudes have to drop dope. Killing Spree, your verse was average at best, my issue with your verse is your wording & executions. I think you tend to drop some nice concepts but get lazy executing them. You typically tend to lean towards the easiest way out when executing your concepts. I think if you got a little more creative with them, your bars would land a lot more effectively. Also, your wording still needs improvement as well as your setups. People tend to sleep on setups but a nice setup for ANY concept can make the bar land a lot more effectively. If you're talking about bitches and hoes in the set up and drop a concept on guns with some type of threat or impalement, then that bar is useless; you get me? What I found worked the best for me, is writing a concept down 3 times w/ 3 different types of setups and executions and reciting them till the harshest one is decided on. Then would go back and touch up on the wording to ensure the bar reads as smooth as possible with no issues. Try it, it helped me back in the day. After a while of that, wording/executions will kind of be like one of those second nature things. Sort of like learning how to ride a bike, lol. Ok now on to the next, Unfuk - Definitely by far probably one of your more weaker verses here. I love your creativity tho, and feel a lot of your bars go over peoples heads but that's good and bad all at the same time. I think you should test your waters before dropping over complex shit. Remember, we the voters decide who the winner is. Try and adjust to what people in the section your battling in enjoy. Sometimes complexity isn't something the majority enjoy or for the most part understand. I, personally enjoy creativity over anything but sometimes you get a little too over excited with it, to be real with you and/or your executions are a huge let down. It's like you come up with some off the wall creative concepts and you get lazy with your executions. If you could keep your executions on the same caliber as your concepts, you'd be a serious problem bro. I find myself ALWAYS telling you this as well. Another issue I have with you, is consistency. You drop dope in one verse and the next is average, then the following is ok, then the following is crazy shit then garbage. You're more or less a roller coaster as far as talent, my man lol if that makes any type of sense. But back to this battle. As far as effective bars;
Killing Spree had: Broken in which had potential and Gluten
Unfukwitable had; Juggler and Prime'll which were executed a little more smoother then Spree's bars mentioned/quoted above.
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v/Unfukwitable - Tad bit more consistent, wording/execution a tad bit better & creativity.
