[rate]~Things Have Changed~[hot!]

..Relax-and-listen, tell me why you're actin-different..
..My back-is-bendin', and I'm about to crack-from-tension..
..We're past-this-friendship, why you gotta play-with-my-mind..
..Ungrateful-and-I'm, about to turn my back-and-end-this..
..But before this crap-gets-twisted, there's one thing-you-should-know..
..That you treated me like NOTHING, and still I'd treat-you-like-gold..
..You were the queen-of-my-throne, and I didn't wanna let-you-leave..
..But you did more than put me through hell, you put hell-through-me..
..Everynight I fell-to-knees, asking why you weren't respectin'-me..
..Wishin-you'd'stop, so-my-heart could finally rest-in-peace..
..Tell-the-devil-to-quit-testin-me, and just let-me-be..
..But I know if I hurt you, baby my body wouldn't let-me-breathe..
..My eyes won't let-me-see, this pen wouldn't let-me-speak..
..Now I finally realize, just how much you meant-to-me..
..My-everything, I know that we were meant-to-be..
..Lets end-this-grief, no more beef, just friends-to-keep..

this was dope, ya flow was nice from start to finish good emotion in the lyrics could feel it every line. the structure was good it was allll good.
return the favour reply 2 my new post.
http://www.rapbattles.com/forum/showthread.php?t=161496

Aight thanx man...Glad u liked this...upping for more feed...Will return the favor...uppin...1

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Originally Posted by warchild

this was dope, ya flow was nice from start to finish good emotion in the lyrics could feel it every line. the structure was good it was allll good.
return the favour reply 2 my new post.
http://www.rapbattles.com/forum/showthread.php?t=161496

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no hate or anything, but wasn't there a "STICKY" in frontlines sayin "Return The Favour Is Over With, if u want votes, don't say return the favour, say something like hit up my battle:

i think the same rule shall apply for OM's aswell........just someting i wanted to add, nice spit though.........

nice drop man, flowed really well, nice wordplay, i like ya strucuture, i could really feel this shit.pz.

Thanx yall...and Track, if you gon come into my thread, can u please leave me some real feed instead of bitchin about me saying that I'll return the favor? Jesus...aight yall...uppin...1

this was pretty decent, the concept was good, and can tell u put a bit of effort into it. But dude, take out the fucking hypens, they are really annoying and pointless, it doesnt improve your structure or anything at all. Other than that, everything was good, the multies were really good of course, so that means the flow was good also, vocab and wordplay was pretty decent, but that's all there is to say, good job, peace.

haha...thanx man...I only add the hyphens so dumb herbs can see the flow...Need more peeps like you...lol...Thanx for the feed man...Uppin this motherfucker!

Converting PPT to PDF is the best thing that I can do on altoppttopdf.com. This is not something that you can do, but something that I will be working on for. It's what I will learn more about.

Wow, glad this got resurrected... I could relate to it a lot and it was honest and emotional too. Well executed.