-=War=-

[Ambient Light]

War


Cry for war, watch thousands more die as the death rate begins to soar…
Middle east prey for long lasting peace but the killing shall never cease…
Families crushed, by the human rush, for killing another 1 in blood lust…
Mothers raped by soldiers who claim abate but kill more and escape…
Not judged by us in god we trust that killers shall perish for such lust…
Bloody scenes cries and death screams so much carnage I cant believe…
Dream of calm in a world suffering harm, essence of peace lies in palm…
Embalm thoughts for the remorse of the lost, peace rather than force…
Source of nature is to cry “WAR” shouldn’t we realise life means more?
World war dramatics charismatic leaders, death in war hailed emphatic…
Tragic to think of a triadic planetary battle, God needs to work magic…
To stop this sporadic person waste, a taste of sin, life in war is disgrace…
Face in combat, the acts of defeat, claiming revenge, it’ll be a repeat…
Another meet of arms, why not touch palms, proclaim a “world calm”…
No harm just heal, feel emotions for people who’ve had the last meal…
Deal in peace talks, course to do right, a new beginning, a concord…
Killers board, uprising resends, it was the beginning – of the end…

The endless cycle of war and Peace, it never going end, its ridiculous far as I’m concerned…

[Ambient Light]

-Brix-

Mag...

[spokenoh]

Hehe, good drop Ambient...nice ish for a newb and of course gettin' slept on. I don't like the structure and the way the bars were set up but it did flow fine. Vocab was good but I felt the topic was played. Nice multies throughout, some of the best..-"World war dramatics charismatic leaders, death in war hailed emphatic…
Tragic to think of a triadic planetary battle, God needs to work magic…"
Good job.

[Freeman]

Ambient = Penskills.. ^silly..

New style for you, Pen..

Unusual..

Stick to the story telling side.. It is your strongest point..

Pz..

[SMZ]

Ehh - wasn't feeling this scheme - I think maybe if you had continued each rhyme for at least two lines it probably would've worked - but line by line like that there were no connections - had decent content though - peace

[UNDEAD.]

Good topic i liked your imagery but it was more story like andless poetic this would of been better if set out as a poem but still nice , could of done some parts better but overall this was good 8/10

[spokenoh]

I knew Freeman^^...just was keepin' it on the "downlow"...lol

[LiL Jay]

haha....you suck....i wasn't feelin that at all,haha