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Thread: Blind Hatred Feat. CrazyCarl

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    Sammy B
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    Blind Hatred Feat. CrazyCarl

    Tha B
    Ignorance is bliss, so they say
    Close mindedness is accepted as ok
    Gather the facts and have the experiences
    To make proper judgments upon chances
    Slowly the seeds of hate make advances
    But with fate a vengeful person dances
    Walking the thin line, reaching their bounds
    With feelings of divine, an alarm sounds
    Stating a cure for blind hatred is found
    Inside every person is compassion
    And the ability for positive reaction
    United are the people in a new faction
    This unity and peace only lasts for a fraction
    An act of hatred so blunt and so cold
    Forming a new bias letting fear take hold
    Innocent victims for whom the bell tolled

    Crazy Carl
    People are being judged everyday
    for some it's their job, but what do the others say
    listen to a cliché....
    we all know about books and their covers
    that little saying all it took to discover
    the impact will get you shook like no other
    you could mistake a crook for your brother
    in what eyes do you look at another
    do you make a decision based solely on race
    is a glance at their face, that is make or break
    in my humble opinion that's a mistake
    make a rumble within ya, let your mind awake
    reacquaint without complaint
    don't need the mindset of a saint
    to show some restraint
    that way the picture you paint
    will be one of unity instead of hate
    Last edited by Sammy B; August 7th, 2005 at 12:30 PM

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    Alize59
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    yo i liked diz piece it was real good. Both of u had real good flows, nice vocabulary, and structure.I would usually say throw some mulit's in there or some more mulit's but this piece didn't need em. I liked da topic 2. Nice collab. Good work keep em comin

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    Sammy B
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    uppin

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    pretty ill..everything was somewhat simple but it worked with this piece...pretty solid man..both verse....nice drop...keep droppin.~1~


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    blind hatred...
    A used topic... and you didnt add much to it... work on structure. Its to short and choppy and simple. use internal rhymes to add more complexity and intelligence to your piece... Next time, be overall MORE creative with the ideas. use topics that arent often thought off... trust me, you can get more indepth with such topics and as you get better, you will learn how do to so...
    keep posting

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    Dune Methane CrazyCarl's Avatar
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    bump...leave links

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    this piece was aight kid. and ya feat. shit was aight to.

    But with fate a vengeful person dances
    Walking the thin line, reaching their bounds
    With feelings of divine, an alarm sounds
    Stating a cure for blind hatred is found



    like tha style/

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    Bleh, this piece was horrid in my opinion sub-par at most. The imagery was not good adn the emotion - terrible. An over-used topic and you brought no originality to it which did not help you at all. Next time get a topic that's not so played and bring something of your own originality to it.

    chea.

    about 4/10 if that
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    Put down the pebbles in my hand, climbed a ladder, put a brick right through your window.
    "You're gonna hear me out." Yeah, hear me out on this!

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    Sammy B
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    Bump took out chorus

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    this was pretty fine I think ya guys should use more more multis and try to keep ya flow tight but lets hope It changes and ya can do smth good.

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    It was decent. The vocab was ok and simple and you told a good message. You stayed at it and none of you outshined the other. Increase ya vocab and use more metaphors. Be more creative, write more. Use more imagery cause it seemed like it was just ya basic song ya see on tv. Try different styles and schemes and keep workin at it.

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    Sammy B
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    uppin for feedback

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    7/10

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    Sammy B
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    bump leave links and I'll return the feedback

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