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    ~~The Seven Deadly Sins~>>


    ~~The Seven Deadly Sins~>>

    Lust~~>

    Your wife isn't pleasing you right.. and it's time for a change
    Always complaining about the kids you've been trying to make
    Rather hit clubs where there's honey's telling you to BEEhave
    bitches sweating me so bad you mistake me for a heatwave
    Girls giving me problems so I just smash until it hurts them
    blushing and telling me to stop like when a traffic light turns red
    But I guess I wouldn't have such difficulty being in love....,
    if I had another way of getting a girl to leave me alone
    My encounters with sex were all that I could seem to achieve
    Cuz Life is full of arguments and the women just needed relief
    And when God says I am the devils body just yearning for hate
    I know the thrill is gone cuz the romance is cursed in this place


    08- Gluttony -80

    Gluttony the second Deadly Sin was the act of consumption
    Like going through lipo-suction to give your ass some reduction
    taking as much as you like, don't care about an equal portion
    There's a recession going on and your still spending a fortune
    Fucking too many women and then forcing them to have abortions
    Whatever the reason, forever on Earth mankind has sold it's soul
    to be tempted by the devil to always want more than is available
    Because no matter how much they eat these fools will never be full
    dinners at fancy restaurants while children starve in the street
    Cause there isn't any store I know that doesn't charge you to eat


    $$$$GREED$$$$

    when money's tight, it's hard to start off, but here's a suggestion
    make cash appear out of nowhere like no one was paying attention
    I can Get anything I need to back me up with a stack of paper
    Money Talks and it also Split the world in half with me like the equator
    And these bitches better not get it right cause their jobs on the line
    There will be replacements faster than I screw bulbs in for light
    Had a safe home, because I used to keep all my cash locked away
    I didn't trust banks so I got away..until someone dropped my name
    Could have saved a million in cash, but I forgot how to lose
    They came for me quick and took everything but a pair of shoes


    Sloth..././.

    Never interested in anything, that meant they wanted me to get help
    So I never did what they said and let things just handle themselves
    For all I know that's the reason that I fell into this great Depression
    The stock market crashed and the economy is back in a Recession
    Pleading me to come back so I could give them their orders
    But I just don't care!!! Because they never listened to me before
    I'd rather fall asleep then have to eat a meal or take a shower
    Wouldn't bother taking a cut..cuz I never used any baking powder
    It wasn't hard to tell that people could make very little use of me
    That's why it got decided I should hang in the middle of the street


    ##Wrath##

    Its no surprise that Gaining Respect was good for business
    Cuz i get props like Real estate agents gave me a new address
    I was blessed with good luck no one born by woman can touch me
    There are no weaknesses in my design, God's the only one above me
    So when the City Revolted.. I did not fret that my blood would shed
    And I made sacrifices by contributing to cutting off my enemies heads
    The voices of the dispossessed will be heard under my legislation
    in this generation..I left words that speak only of my own assassination
    So when my killer did come.. he told me that he was not born by woman
    That he was ripped from the womb and my charm was my own ruin.


    + Envy +

    Looking back I Used to have a lot of friends and be so popular
    Don't want to turn into a failure.. That's why I gotta work harder
    My boys aren't around anymore so I don't know who I can trust
    Cats are starting to sketch-out and come out with their hands up
    Count the hours so your cash starts to add up cuz time is money
    wrap you up and bury you in a pyramid in the desert like a mummie
    All these cats hating and jealous that I am a killer on the street
    pop up on some fucking fiends and introduce them to the heat
    Don't let someone get you so angry that they control your life
    But really, how can I give advice? When life's just a roll of the dice


    ^^Pride^^

    Always tried his best even though things were hard to achieve
    Trip pokes out his chest and wears his heart on his sleeve
    The most dangerous discovery was this was one of a kind
    it makes him want to challenge how we're becoming so blind
    So it turns into a fight between what Trip told him was right..
    And the fact that you weren't holding the truth in the light
    One of the greats! cause I can see where this is starting to fit
    Trip's starting a fight club with Brad and has more bark than a Pitt



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    Re: ~~The Seven Deadly Sins~>>

    first of all...lose the colors....it's easy to get lost in a verse and read the shit twice with the red...although i do see what your goin for...

    anyways....awesome concept...but i had a few problems with it....you lost the flow in each verse atleast once....and alot of your attempted met/ similies were just either wack...or a simple miss...personally for the topic you chose...you really coulda done it without even using any of those and just spit it....this felt more like a peice that shoulda kicked knowledge rather then skill....

    anyways....can't knock it til you try it right? still an alright spit....but next time...don't try doing so much...
    ..iCONSTRUCT..
    ..Ecliptik aka. Orijin..

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    Re: ~~The Seven Deadly Sins~>>

    i thought i was supposed to try when i write,
    but i guess getting feedback is alright..//.

    sorry you weren't feeling the plot,
    but I wasn't trying to write a story..
    Just wanted to get some of my ideas out there../.

    can i get some more heads to peep this?
    i worked on it for a while, and would like to hear other opinions..
    I know it seems like a lot, but I think it's worth a look-over.././

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    Re: ~~The Seven Deadly Sins~>>

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