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    Dont pretend your life is hard ( if its not)

    first off. This song has no application to anyone here just people I know. Also, if your life really is hard then don't feel like I am saying anything to negate that.

    When I hear people complaining about having it tough or falling from grace
    I gotta be honest and say I just can't relate
    sure I gotta lot of shit on my plate
    but I have a great life thats why a smiles on my face
    never had my heart break, and never had much to hate
    I'm not saying it easy but for the most part its great
    I aint gonna pretend that its hard cuz that belittles those who life through shit everyday

    to those posers who everyone knows are pretending
    try to think for a minute of who you might be offending
    think about those whose lives might be ending
    before you act like an asshole consider whose heart might be rending


    listen I'm not here to chew anyone out
    only to give heed to something people dont really think about
    that when you say shit about life and get real loud
    that someone is really hurting and isnt just part of the crowd

    some of you deal with real shit and some of you dont
    some of you might listen a bit and some of you wont
    some people spit lyrics just to rock the boat
    like to shove their pretentious lyrics down everyones throat
    talk about their problems like they are a reason to boast
    get everyones attention like they are makin a toast
    indulging their own egos as if they were the host

    I guess all I'm saying is that my life is just fine
    and when you have it good whining is a waste of everyones time
    it belittles the folks who have it rough which should be a lyrical crime
    not to mention we all have to hear this fag whine

    I did this completely off the top of my head in a couple minutes so it will prolly suck, but its just stuff I wanted to say.
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    Re: Dont pretend your life is hard ( if its not)

    This was simple, but I get what you saying. It wasn't that detailed but you hold a strong enough message. Solid piece. Work on your bar lengths, it was kinda stretched.
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    Re: Dont pretend your life is hard ( if its not)

    I agree with GTech great message but very simple. Try to add in some flare to your words to make the reader interested. Some of your lines felt way too stretched to make you have a nice flow work on that. RTF on my OpenMic Recognition please.

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    thanks for the feed. Yeah I just wrote what was on the top of my head I definitely need to actually put some work in

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    uppin

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