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    True-Souldja
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    Above Us

    Another death leaves a family weeping,
    But know that hes happy forever sleeping,
    Whenever thinking bout us look above,
    Where we be happy with the endless love,
    I only learned to be the heartless thug,
    Beauty defined when I die from an 'artists' slug,
    But now filled wit emotion Im feeling fraud,
    But all I got to do is pray and talk to our god,

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    *Daughter of 00* DthsMissingAngel's Avatar
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    This was good. I liked it. Flow and scheme were both good. You let emotions out. Even thou it was short, it was still nice. Short and to the point. Overall I liked it. Keep it up.

    Another death leaves a family weeping,
    But know that hes happy forever sleeping,
    Whenever thinking bout us look above,
    ^^fav lines.

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