jimmywhite vs Dev

[~HoTTie~]

Flow - Dev...
Multi- White...The only thing you did actually come nice in.
Punches - Dev
Wordplay- Dev
Vocab-Dev
Structure- Dev
Verse- Dev


Alright, good battle from both. Dev, your verse was good although you did a lil bit of feeding. Its ok though, you only did it in one line. Nice punches, you kept them short and simple....You use nice vocab. Good verse from you.

White.....you went wrong in alot of places, your lines were stretched, and you don't get to the point. The D.E.V. line was a nice attempt at a personal but it didn't work. Don't talk about dick so much, makes look gay. Ok....Your verse was iight, just work on those lines, and don't use such played lines...nice verse

good battle to both

Vote - Dev

[÷Thìñg÷]

ya spits aint shit, wanna hit and start hatin?
i mean whats DEV? {D}ick {E}nlargement {V}acation?
IM SICKER~THAN~THA~GAME, so you the PICK~OF~THA~LAME,
im startin to wonder whats shorter...YOUR DICK~OR~YA~NAME?
cmon pussy, cmon and push-me swearin an shouting,
ITLL STILL BE OBVIOUS, this battle is like gary colman against yao-ming.
ya shits like a 'LIMP DICK', CUZ EVERYTHIN IS 'HARD~AS~YOU',
cuz you just a 'pussy with beef' like 'lesbian barbeques.'
i aint gunna argue-wit-you, so come back wack,
with an attack of bitch ass battle raps ya sister wrote for you in her math class.
BITCH ILL 'BLAST~THIS-GEEK', havin ya period LASTIN-FOR-WEEKS,
ya HALF ASSED lines aint hard, like unmasculant-cheeks!
THROW A 'PUNCH BACK', like 'quazimoto rhymes', ya HUNCH'S~WACK,
you like the fuckin CHIP AND DALE, the way you MUCH~ON~SACK!
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fix ya struc and dont caplock ya words thats herb shit,or ive heard
anyways 6/10 overall so elavate homie punches werent directed very well
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Its 2004, not 92… yet this kid’s droppin played lines
I wouldn’t mind another time…but half of them are mine
So unless their blind… they've made the association
Good this is only text… and you've got bad pronunciation!
God father in ya sig… don’t make you a playa
White never won the title… So like him you’re a failure
A 147 break I don’t think so… you’re plain snookered
Again its jimmy white that cues… gets a first round knock out
So that last bar don’t rhyme… but you highlight the multi
So we’re even… except JW equals,,, ya Just Worried…
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nice struc and good werdplay overall 8/10
aight well dev had more directed punches and personals
which won him this plus his was more of a battle verse
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vote/Dev
hit my sig dogg dont leave me hangging

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[Endeva.]

final uppin..................
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[Emerge]

im not gonna break this down....what the hell for??

jimmy white.... work on structure and learning what a punch is
please dont use too many multies that is gay and no one likes it
dont caps lock every word it makes you seem retarded

dev....you had some ok punches not great but not bad either
i saw one or two that were played you hit him well with personals
your structure was fine...you killed him

vote dev

[Potent]

de got this he came harder wit punches and his flow was beetter also jimmy you came ight is juss you need broader punches and u need to quit blodin words that not necessary...and wrok on rhymin better.. and quit forcin multies

VOte Ev

[ILLunatic]

Dev got this...

Jimmywhite came ok
But his punches were not that great
Flow was decent, wordplay could be used
Personals were weak...

i mean whats DEV? {D}ick {E}nlargement {V}acation?

I swear thats bittin, but i dont kno from where
Overall verse was ok.. 10-20

Dev came straight
Punches were decent
Wordplay was ok...
Flow was pretty good
Personals were lacked
Structure was nice...
Overall.. good verse... 13/20

Vote-Dev
Came a bit harder with punches
Structure was better too..