Maiming Magdelene (Warning: Sick and disgusting content. You KNOW you wanna read.)

[Civilized Rebel]

Y'know I've noticed that there is a lot of new folk around this board. Or as the L337 would say "t|-|3r3 b3 4 |_0t 0f n00b5 huh huh huh" Whats up with that? Or as I would say while trying to intigrate the japanese word for horse radish into the common american tongue, "Wasabe with that?".

Um... I'll just get this over with. Maiming Magdelene. Old peice I did quite a while ago, but I've done a ton of touch ups to it. I think I got it the way I want. Not quite as subtle as I would like though. Love peace chicken grease.

Mo-mentai-()
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Maiming Magdalene

Like fine wine you had to wait some time
For her I had to wait before I made her mine
Checked the obituarys
Amazing what the paper carrys
People dying all the time
But that's just fine
I care more about the paper no longer costing a dime
Then it hit me like a shout or scream
A woman died... named Magdalene
I remember her; she was such a dream
Oh how she was so ill fated
Who am I kidding? It was me she hated
I guess I wasn't good enough for her
No sir! She was a material girl
Time for her to pay her pennance
And time for me to get my vengence

After her funeral rites
After the darkness covers the lights
I'm thinking she can never put up a fight
Out of sight out of mind
The way she treated me was never too kind
Then again, love is blind
Oh the wonders of her corpse I shall find
Together we shall bind
For sure, love is dead

Grab my shovel and start to dig
Farewells I bid and dig dig dig
Dig dig dig till I open up her lid
What's that you said?
That's right NOTHING BITCH! Because you dead
Using my favorite knife and severing your head
Removing your pants at the same time I rant
You used to treat me like an outcast
But now is the time for you to spread your legs fast
I warned you that your life would not last

Tongue licking tittie
So frozen what a pity
Now it's time to get nitty gritty
I aint trying to be rude
We gotta strip to the nude
I look you over one more time
And now the time to make you mine
Use your severed tongue licking my dick
Lick lick lick you dumb blonde bitch
Turn you over now it's doggy style
Right in the ass where things be so vile
All the while I'm thinking of your hate
Imagining you being dead and raped
Your leg fell off? I'll get that duct taped
Fuck fate
You're my bitch now
In my head running around
Imagining the ways you could get shot down
Pound I pound in your ass so smooth
Love making never had this hatefilled groove
It feels great not having you move

Magdalene I hate you

But your hatred towards me is all in the past
Hump fast hump fast my load I blast
Your villinous ways treating me like piss
Are over and I bet you never thought of this
Your lips are cold to the kiss
Would I be so bold as to assume you can take my fist
It aint like it would hurt if I removed your mandible
Experiment on what your body can handle
Upon your skin burns wax from the candle
Tie you up to the casket
I start using my whip
The joy of your death
How times like these I praise Lord Seth
No pain threshold so I put your arms around me and fold
It seems I am so bold
To be fucking in the cold
Over and over till your skin rots off
Lover my lover both our souls have been lost

I remember you; you were such a dream
Now that your dead, I'm maiming Magdalene

[ShaYneA]

you kno every time i come on this bored i see ppl from way back being slept on.......i see teh mod not doing her job........i see ppl like you with awesome poetry that is just left to rought........i see newbies froliking in big headed im so ill land..........and that is why i very rarely visit this board.......***...***....***.....***......im teh mod there and the poetry room is up to par and this kinda iah doesnt happen i rember you from way before you got band........i rember your wise ass comments........and i rember your from oregon.....as am i.......
this peice is very well put together...........and im not gonna qoute any part cuz frankyl i just want to keep it whole........very nice peice necro.........please come check out ***,........and post this peice there.........much luh HAZY

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Tsk Tisk ^
Fo` ur information i been in hospital
after bein jumped / fight ... i think my health
is more important then this inet bullshit!!

This poem flowed well,
sorru i havent been round to peep ur ish,
but u know i respect u and ur talent!

Much Love
xXx DiMe
~1~

[Varentao]

yes...this was darkly and sick....but is that just how your mindset covers up the deep pain and sorrow that you feel?....people deal with it in different ways...

....well i cannot really understand ones mindset over the internet....it would be too presumtious...but i felt this on two levels...even though i would think it was the second level that you were really on about....a heart broken...rejected...a soul tore apart....trampled upon...and now ridden with ghosts....turning into anger....stretching the mindset into a dark and sickly extreme......


....tis a great piece of poetism on these here scriptures...didnt really have much flaws to it in that sense...

...respect....

[ShaYneA]

uppin

[Tru "The Return"]

haha
you already know I luv diss poem like shit so no sense in me tellin you agian...
it my favorite n the #1 spot forreal this poem is hellava to me...
hate that I aint in it but it my fav out of all 50 somthine of mine and bout all 1000+ I've read...
props props props wish I coulda been in it... sniffs*


But tell dem chicks you already at a hella board thnkx to yo baby Tru

stay up boo
~1~ Luv

[Neruda II]

Damn this poem is creative and sick. A poem about necrophilia, talk about original. Everything flowed well even though the lines weren't even, I strive to achieve that. I didn't see any undertones, just creativity and lots of it. It was sick, but hell, it kept me reading the whole way through. This a truly great piece, sick, demented, incredible.

[Twizted Ayngel]

Of course one of the most disturbing poems I've ever read, and I enjoyed every word of it. I can't even sum this up into words. I'm not quite sure how to put it into words I guess. I enjoyed reading this - one of those things you're kind of worried about enjoying reading. It flowed well, thats a plus. The vocabulary was also good. Man, I dont even know what to say about this. I'm speechless.

Great job though.

[Bloom.Quist]

Eh. Kinda freaks me out. Great job man ill drop a honest critic tomorrow its too late. Glad to see angel back too. Been gone awhile.

[Civilized Rebel]

Why does this thread exist?

If it weren't for Tru being in it, and if not for Tru liking it as much as she does, I'd ask for this thread to be deleted.

Damn, someones done more digging to find this then I do to find my dates. BWAHAHAHA!!! Ah... uh... sorry, not funny.

Seriously, this is shit, don't read it don't reply just let it fucking die. Like varentao's poem about the banana. Sigh... that phallicle banana... good times.

[Neruda II]

Sorry man, I was looking through all your old poems and I liked this.

I apologize.