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    A Mother's Poem

    hey all, I wrote this piece for mother's day, which I know was awhile ago, but I'm finally getting around to posting it, any feedback is appreciated, thanks

    A Mother's Poem


    A mother is a person who is there through heaven and through hell
    A mother will be there, when you are sick or when you’re well
    A mother is a person who will always love and always care
    A mother is a person who is there when the hallway’s bare
    When everyone else has left, too busy with their life
    A mother will be there, a mother will be right
    And even if you think she’s not, and if sometimes you think she’s dumb
    A mother will be there, when you have no place to run
    A mother will be there, with her arms always open wide
    Even if you have no place run, you always have a place to hide
    A place where everything is nice, a place that makes you feel you’re loved
    A place that makes you realize there is someone above
    Looking down on everyone, and doing what he can
    Working with mothers everywhere, to turn a boy into a man
    It may be tough, you may give up, and sometimes it may be hard
    But there will always be a special place for you, inside a young one’s heart
    And although he may not always say those three words you want to hear
    And even though his life window may not be crystal clear
    He does love you, this is the truth, and truth it will always be
    Now I guess I should say “I love you”, instead of always “me”

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    Emotional, but simple, lines...
    This Was ok...

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    I agree this was emotional and I can tell that you love her alot. Although your lines were pretty basic but Im not going to knock you for that one because you love your mother so much and its so easy to say and express it that you dont need a complex form of speech to interprit that, nice job.

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