It was decent. You had good imagery and good structure. Keep at it, you have good potential. I liked how you used the I wishes and how you wrote this good job. Work more on flow and youll do well.
It was decent. You had good imagery and good structure. Keep at it, you have good potential. I liked how you used the I wishes and how you wrote this good job. Work more on flow and youll do well.
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View this from last year^
i appreciate the feedback
yo let me be in this shit cause i am down with it
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lol ok fine wit me
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