Gotta have Faith

[Engivale]

Gotta have Faith





I get to feelin' the worst when I seal in the curse,
Real are the works of God concealed in a person's job...
Subversive nod, agree with the decreed myth ---
Never heard of all of these people who actually need shit...
American dreams are something that seems far...
I need a miracle, I'm spiritual and money's a green scar,
On my heart broken in two, the halves have spoken to you,
I'm scared to smoke seratonin in the zone with the crew...
An old man is waiting, he knows that he's due,
To go with the few things,
Coat, hat and shoe strings he's owed when he's blue..
Lose my focus and spew thoughts that are absent like flu shots,
Bruise cops, Use coke and fuck Sue's throat while dudes watch!
My mood swaps from relaxed to relapsed,
I need traps,
If I do cost myself it's because there's no free facts...
Growth is obtained from lows and going insane,
Being told 'no' and you just keep coping the same,
Done moping, the flame flickers and my brain snickers,
The pain lingers,
There's one opening in my usually trained fingers,
They fly and they trace, race, run awry and misplace,
Chase ideas across the bottom and tops of a page,
I stop and I wait for a lost thought that I make,
Hop in a lake
Of creation that's just too awesome to take...
The point of a lot of this is just to avoid politics---
Fuck discussing if Hillary's better or whether Obama is,
The problem is so much deeper, but roots stick,
And new thick layers are put on top of it, STUPID!
Applaud the distractions like Moss to the sapped limbs,
And rely on what they give you and I when the cash ends...
Just so happens it's what you'd see if it were up to me,
You won't believe it direct so I inject what I teach subtlely...
A gentle persuasion's my intent for mental relation,
Case in point I'd rather connect with then amaze men,
But at day's end I sit still and write out this shit to spill,
And if it's ill I turn the light out and my vision's filled...
Faith is a luxury,
When we love it we pay the price every day,
I know it's fair to think noone's there when we pray...
But how dare we to say that God doesn't exist?
Wasn't he pissed when you blamed him
For every bit of perfection you've missed?
Stop praying for easy street and maybe you'll see defeat,
Nothing easily gained is worth the same if you've seen the meek,
The humble are truly blessed, I guess it's something to shoot for,
To get rich and have the attitude of someone who's poor...
But a few score and some years ago I felt my spirit flow...
It appeared to grow when love was what I knew I was here to know...





links 2morrow.

[.SuiGeneris.]

It's been awhile since I left feedback. Anyways. The flow was straight, I like'd it, made it easy to read. The Rhyme Scheme was good, got your own style and it worked well with the structure of your piece. This had complexity in it, due to vocab usage and they were used properply, Nicly Done. At first when I read this piece, It kind of felt like a 'rant' and then at the end you started to get your point across, started to put the pieces together of this whole verse. Then I read it again and it started to make sense. The creativity and approach you've took toward the Topic was 'meh', I felt it could've been better but the Imagery was def on point, the best part of this whole verse. Overall, this was a good drop. Church.

[Engivale]

Up? I'm gonna go read some pieces now.

http://www.rapbattles.com/forum/show...er-362894.html
http://www.rapbattles.com/forum/show...ps-362859.html

[Vincent Maestro]

Up? I'm gonna go read some pieces now.

word I'll leave feed when you do.

[Vincent Maestro]

i'ma do some psycho analyzing here...this felt like it could have been an answer song to baron P. mortuus-"Belief killed God".....or maybe i'm just reading too much into it.

http://www.rapbattles.com/forum/show...od-362773.html



When we love it we pay the price every day,
I know it's fair to think noone's there when we pray...
But how dare we to say that God doesn't exist?
Wasn't he pissed when you blamed him
For every bit of perfection you've missed?
liked these lines alot.............................................. .....

i don't know eng....its like you keep getting better and better man.
Like I always say you're one of my favorite writers on rb.
(its out of you witness and Ledgenz)...anyways

I get to feelin' the worst when I seal in the curse,
Real are the works of God concealed in a person's job...
Subversive nod, agree with the decreed myth ---
Never heard of all of these people who actually need shit...
thats dope...how you said..."Need shit"...very poetic.

i read this a few times...cause its that entertaining thanks for that
and thanks for the feed on my shit...it means alot from you.

[Que-C]

Real are the works of God concealed in a person's job

Never heard of all of these people who actually need shit

Bruise cops, Use coke and fuck Sue's throat while dudes watch

Stop praying for easy street and maybe you'll see defeat,
Nothing easily gained is worth the same if you've seen the meek,
The humble are truly blessed, I guess it's something to shoot for,
To get rich and have the attitude of someone who's poor

it seeems like besides those couple whole bars you had a lot of good one liners at best. the vocabulary and word play wasnt hurt because of it but when you spoke intellectually it was plain, but when you spoke plainly it was more intellectual. some shit sounded like line fillers, or ideas that jus din't catch. the theme of the piece was obvious but it didn't really seem to go any where, like you lost voice with the reader at the end and it was you giving a monologue. your ideas seperated you from a lot of the other cats, but your vocab and tone is pretty much the same i've seen on this site for a while now. overall a 8/10 for those few one liners and those few bars, kinda shit i wish i thought of, but its cool cause you stated what i've felt since i was younger, peace

[_Lyrics]

nice piece eng, back at it right after winning wop huh? you ripped it fam, the internals and multis were everywhere.. all written nicely, the emotion and imagery was crazy, very easy read too. 1st bar did a good job drawing me into the piece itself. its great to see your still dropping them skills to the fullest yo. your views and outlooks were appealing to me, some lines seemed woven together with pretty smooth wording too. and i could quote alot of lines.. there was this flash intensity in some lines that had my eyes rising, very good write and appritiated the read

[P. Mortuus]

Okay....so firstly I liked this...it fits nicely into my mindframe, which made it interesting to read. The whoel first segments before the ending verses felt like a collection of images your showing the reader, It was like I was in a journey with you and was looking at what you were seeing and trying to convey through your words. The flow as susal is typcial Engivale flow, so no problems there at all. Nice fluid transitions, easily rolled off my tounge. Which is one of the main points of reading your pieces, is how effortlessly they roll off the tounge. Anyhow, I liked the ending the most, it seemed fitting.....coincidently a piece I had recently written was like the near opposite of your pieces conclusion...which made it all the more enjoyable. Good work man, good to see you still dropping above par work.

When you can:
http://www.rapbattles.com/forum/show...od-362773.html

[Orc]

Okay, great flow here, man, it just rolled off tongue, haha - fresh rhyme-scheme which encouraged me too read on, refreshing. The topic itself was cool, nothing too over the top - sort of laid back. The imagery was nice, especially in the first six or seven lines or so, I enjoyed it. The whole piece was great, no grammar errors or words misused which is also a refreshing thing. Hit up my piece 'Bites', I'd appreciate the feedback.

http://www.rapbattles.com/forum/show...re-363050.html

[Johnny 6-feet]

A strong piece as expected eng, topically this came off as a rant more than anything else. It was interesting, you brought togetehr strong imagery and mixed it up with good, but not OTT, vocab and a strong rhyme scheme which helped the flow along. The length was just right to hold my attention. Good stuff.

Keep posting and please rtf: http://www.rapbattles.com/forum/show...me-362915.html

[Engivale]

thx for the looks all, i'll be looking at shit 2night after work... gotta roll now, tho

[LedgenZ]

Uh....wow! I'll be back to leave feed later. But, wow dudes, seriously.

[antology]

Nice drop. Like it