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    Blind poetry

    blind poetry
    Broadcasting my seed to sandy floors
    too course to retain the downpour
    when i pour it.
    Just a blind poet
    Braille feels like bumps
    on the bumps on your fingertips
    It is my tounge;
    Sensations lingering
    on skin.
    Lustrous memories of texture and sound.
    Murals of emotion
    painted with smell, faint strokes on sticky paper
    The artist is proud, sometimes
    Seeking an audience.
    I dont wish too much to get me sad.
    Shifty comfort in Difference,
    Content. It is, maybe.


    If we pace with me from where i started
    you can trace my meaning
    Hear me gasp,
    hold my breath,
    even my breathing
    along this.
    A longing that you'l faintly feel it,
    press hard into the words,
    scratch the paper
    maybe tear it
    If you feel too keenly.


    An emotion unshared
    Art lost
    the world is locked
    away from my cosmo of galleries
    Fated to rot
    like others of this form
    Erased by better imprints
    and snapped into nothing.
    I should'nt have had these seeds
    'cause I now wish for even weeds
    whose thoughtlesness in eating
    is acknowlwdgement of existence..
    ..My worth of murder
    of thoughts
    written in dots
    In hope the world will someday read.

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    Re: Blind poetry

    2nd link coming up

    feeds please

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    Re: Blind poetry

    http://www.rapbattles.com/forum/show...te-365156.html

    a piece about un-noticed art gets slept on the same way. nice twist.

    some feedback please PS

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    Re: Blind poetry

    http://www.rapbattles.com/forum/show...ck-369130.html

    A peice about unnoticed art gettin slept on right here the same way. Feedback please yo

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    Re: Blind poetry

    http://www.rapbattles.com/forum/show...ck-369130.html

    A peice about unnoticed art gettin slept on right here the same way. Feedback please yo

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    Re: Blind poetry

    The poem as a whole was really inspirational my dude. You familiarized us to your character in such a way that as a reader i wanted to find out more... You you didn't give too much away but also illustrated the transitions very well.. The last stanza is the best for me. Its jam packed with deepness and as a result was very emotional... For me to have seen it as emotional it means there was plenty imagery in there... The language was not difficult to follow yet set a very firm tone and in a nut shell it was captivating... Big- ups

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