Flowed very nicely, was real good read.
Yeah as people have said this would be a good audio. Keep it up man!
Flowed very nicely, was real good read.
Yeah as people have said this would be a good audio. Keep it up man!
this was real nice yo... flowed very well, i do admit for me the flow dropped in one spot i think but anyways, no biggy, very good vocab... i like your choice of words in this... some creative lines with very good multies... keep it up... we should collab man
this was dope as fuck
Your style is artificial, you're not even part official
It aint hard to rip you, youre finished before I start to diss you
I'll turn your squad against you, basically, facin' me,
Is like tryin' to stop a chartered missle with a starter pistol
that line killed it..i literally was like "wow.." and this is coming from someone with alot of longevity and some seriously complex shit in his arsenal...i love this man..this is what i live for..its my style..i could see you spittin with me side by side ..although parts were a bit bumpy as far as flow when i read it out loud..this is great..just hope your delivery is dope too
no doubt Piff, 'preciate the feed. and I'm a perfectionist so the flow is perfect when I spit it, but the flow in text form depends on the reader, you might've paused in the wrong spot, or didn't pause in the right spot, know what I'm saying? I peeped that joint 'verbal craftsman' you just dropped, shit is on point I'll hit that up with some feed later tonight.
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I enjoyed this. This was on that straight up battle-rap lyrical shit. Obviously your flow and rhyme-scheme are your key-points... very strong skill there and is useful for when you try to write more poetic and deeper shit like story-lines and stuff... I write a lot of stuff with that same crazy rhyming in it, but when it comes to texting, i prefer to read shit with more meaning. This would be dope as fuck on audio instead. My issue tho is the title lol Lyrical Slaughter? no offense but thats played out as shit, those are the type of titles i USED to use mad years ago. It just sounds noobish. And BTW this website has some of the most lyrical shit u can ever find, u just gotta read more experienced member's pieces. Keep up the lyrical shit bro.
http://www.rapbattles.com/forum/show...rs-384511.html
^Return feed please.
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Lyrically D.O.P.E.
haha ^^^I just found out this muthafucka BetterDays stole this whole joint:
http://letsbeef.com/forums/showthread.php?t=40016
tisk, tisk...
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lmao jesus fuckin christ
this is nasty man
shits retarded thats how sick it is