N!gga, what?

[Zig_Zag]

Hey guys, new to the forum and have only been rapping for about a week, I'm currently recording my first ever track and at the advice of my musical brother have had to scrap my first verse as it has the N word in it...and I'm white.

here's the verse:

I aint no nigga but I am a black sheep
I'm justryna find my path but I lost bo peep
Lord please forgive my ass coz I've gone too deep
I patient-ly pray it wont last but I'm up shits creek
an you gonna follow me, you gonna follow me

To give you all some context I never use that word. Not with friends, not with family. Actually, aside from this verse I don't remember ever saying it.

I didn't mind using the word in this particular instance because I intended for it to be a play on words, almost like flipping the N word on it's head. in the context of the verse it works well and without it the whole thing falls apart.

As I said I'm really new to rapping and writing lyrics and I'd like your views on not only this verse but the whole issue too, am I right in thinking that word is off limits to us crackas no matter what intentions are?

One love,
Ziggy

ps cool forum.

[emcee danger]

personally, i don't use it. if i can't get the point of what i'm saying across using derogatory terms (no matter how they're meant to be interpreted), then i fix that. i see no use for it. as for the verse, it was far too simple.. not even a verse, really. 5 lines.. not even 3 bars man. you had no multies in there, and the concept was far too basic. deffinately up your game, and also read the rules.

[Zig_Zag]

Yeah I agree with you mate which is why I scrapped it. Sorry, you're right it's not a verse. I don't really know the technical terms for anything but I assure you I'm not a one post wonder. I'll learn eventually. Thanks for the feedback mate. Appreciated.

[V The MC]

Yeah I agree with you mate which is why I scrapped it. Sorry, you're right it's not a verse. I don't really know the technical terms for anything but I assure you I'm not a one post wonder. I'll learn eventually. Thanks for the feedback mate. Appreciated.

Agree about the N word. How bout:

Ain't Black but I am a black sheep
Where's my way back I lost Bo Peep

needs to be 16 Bars

[SonUDaily]

good try for ya first shit but look at others and then compare see the problem and fix it from vocab to the whole 9 yard if u hav to

[Cody Nash]

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