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    Prayer

    This is just stupid religeous fanatical shit.

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    Prayer

    Pray to the north and pray to the south
    But you can't pray till you've opened your mouth
    Pray to the east and pray to the west
    You aint truly humble if you think you're the best

    That's why I speak to those who want to learn
    To those that have the fire inside that burns
    For those that look for the answers in life
    For those that want to escape from this strife

    I invoke the powers of spirits within us
    Cause what's up above don't give a fuck about us
    As within so without, DNA and genetic traits
    And your spirit, your soul, and the power it creates

    It's all one thing within the grand scheme
    And it's up to us to figure out what it means
    The Earth, the air, the fire, the water return return return
    The elements in each of us burns and burns and burns


    This is my book of shadows, hear me out
    I can't write, can't rap, so I gotta spout
    And to the god and goddess within, hear me out
    I can't write, can't write, so I gotta shout

    I pray for strength, so I can be stronger
    I pray for life, so I can live longer
    And I pray to make that life worth living
    I pray that I might have something in life worth giving

    And I pray that all may hear my call
    Hip-Hop elements, graffiti on the wall
    Emcees rapping, the B'boys breaking
    Dj's breakbeats got the room shaking

    The Dj the foundation of the Earth we stand
    The graffiti is the fire only few can understand
    The B'boys move like water as they flow
    But us emcees are the air breath in, breath slow
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    mmmmmm, WerD
    But it was nice, very mmmmm how can i say this....
    Segmented (if it makes any sense)
    your stanza's are set like blocks and each block i read it adds more and more depth to the poem,
    a nice little concept and great wording
    Props

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    And to the god and goddess within, hear me out
    I can't write, can't write, so I gotta shout
    ^
    referiing to yourself as both sexes? or did i get teh wrong impression
    well i belive that referring to yourself as both gave this peice a VIBE of strength and security because if you refer to yourself as both there is no way for one to disagree with teh other...
    it makes sense ot me but probably not you

    this was an excellent peice necro and i found that your skill truly shined through in this

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    I found this to be driveling shit, but to be fair, I say that about all my scheiße.

    Anyway, the god and goddess within part was about the God and Goddess. Y'know, a dualistic divine force of masculinity and femininity. Only I don't believe in astrology's saying "As above, so below". Mostly because it's hearesay. But the native American Earth Medicine saying "As within, so without" has show its solidity time and time again. (For example, electrons and protons rotate around an atoms nucleus. The without in this case, is similiar to that of planets orbiting the sun.) And from this I just derived that if there really is a God and Goddess that they probably are not omnipresent beings seperated from reality looking down on us like we're cockroaches. But rather... they are within the very fiber of our being. Within us, not above us.

    Although I wrote this peice quite a long time ago. I'm not even sure if I believe in the duality anymore. If I do, it's not as strong. I believe if their is a creator that it's a female. Logically, if all creatures are born of a woman, then it makes sense that the universe itself was born of a woman and is being nurtured by one (or all).

    But the overall grandscheme was to relate my own religeous beliefs to Hip-Hop. Graffiti fire, B'Boy's water, Emcees air and Dj's Earth. I think the picture explains it well since the Pentagram is a Wiccan symbol that represents the five elements, the fifth generally being Knowledge or Soul.

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    'But the overall grandscheme was to relate my own religeous beliefs to Hip-Hop. Graffiti fire, B'Boy's water, Emcees air and Dj's Earth.'

    And you did that. I love works guided by the Craft. Magick is a mystical beast. I also felt the 'Oneness' with everything here.. The ancienct belief that everything is nothing, nothing is everything. To those people that are eternally searching, from birth to rebirth and beyond. I love this entire theme.

    'I pray for strength, so I can be stronger
    I pray for life, so I can live longer
    And I pray to make that life worth living
    I pray that I might have something in life worth giving'

    Here it became more personal, letting us envisage a small part of what makes you, you. What drives you and why you seek the answers.

    The Dj the foundation of the Earth we stand
    The graffiti is the fire only few can understand
    The B'boys move like water as they flow
    But us emcees are the air breath in, breath slow

    Then you bring it all back to the music, and you share with us that connection you have with the music.
    'The music of life'
    This is your music of life.
    Interesting piece Necro..enjoyed reading, and listening to it.

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    love the beat. ya voice and ya flow give ya an original style too. the no chours was a good idea wit this. i think ya flow should litein up a lil bit, cause its hard to make out ya words sum times. i liked this though best ve luck on where ya tryin to do. stay up and stay active.

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    iight

    i liked this for the simple fact that its a piece that doesnt make you want to cry at the end, but it still makes you think still. the opening was what caught me, and was the part i loved the most, it showed that you care about ppl you've never met, and your wishing for them to be blessed, ect. i thought the whole piece was impressive, but i expected as much before i read it!

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