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    Thug Life

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    Ill never give up
    heads still up - slantin it wit pride
    put the troubles to the side
    and just ridddeeee
    the decision-is-mine...

    As i watch the barrel-flash
    and the farewell-to-life-splash
    i dash into the nearest path
    runnin and not lookin back
    head the attack never fear
    never retreat
    becuz at the seat - of the cup u will drink wit fallen foes
    caught a murder case
    for some hit i did 5 years ago
    i member that nut exactly the spittin-of-clips
    clashin-fists, masive-hits
    cats droppin-clips poppin
    a ghetto 14 year old murderin
    on top of the world
    till it all crashed beneath-him
    but in his mind u cant defeat-the-young
    cuz its thug life he yelled
    when the truck came for awaital
    it all came crashin-down-to-tha-ground
    snatched the 5 0's gun~slangin-to-the-mouth-and-clickin-the-sound
    layed dead wit a clip aquital into his forhead....

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    this was nice kinda choppy...simple vernacular in this but it worked well though

    you should work a little on structure so its easier to read though

    much props good write

    peace

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    good flow son,work on elevatin ya wordplay and creativity


    played topic though

    other than that, nice

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    thanks yo upp

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    Not Bad.. Like It Was Said.. Choppy
    But Decent At That.. Coulda Been Better
    Work On It Sum More

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    snakeyes
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    too much thugness boy. you know, this aint that wack. i kind of like the world play. but still you need to learn that you in the real world.

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    X_JohnnyWattz_X
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    work on structure but u still gets props 7.5/10

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    Formula
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    Flow Was Choppy, Lacked Decent Word Play, Topic Was Played, Structure Was Bad. Not Sayin That This Drop Was Totally Wack, You Jus Need To Work On Some Things Aight. Keep Droppin.

    -Formula.

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    dat shit was iight......needs more time into it i think holla at me iight
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    STUFF WUZ TIGHT, GOOD FLOW, KEEP SPITTIN'

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    junio sixnine
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    wtf...^^^...these are freeposts...

    well...it wasnt 100% wack...keep workin, u got potential. but honestly i didnt like it. nothing was really special about it. but like i said, keep working. kick in some nice structure and topics, i think you got the potential to be ill at rhyming words. just keep practicing.

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