im new to rb but i wrote this yest. and would really appreciate feedback..
i cried me a river that led to an ocean
spilled all my feelings and spread out my emotions
you told me you loved me so i let my heart open
then you said it was over leaving me crushed and broken
i tried building a bridge that would cover the pain
but in the past you walked across it and took all i had to gain
you got to the other side before i had a chance to change
and once again walked away leaving me full of shame
i threw my tears in the river along with my soul
and let the currents flow take total control
as i slowly walked across, the swinging bridge couldnt hold
all the weight i was still carrying, so it began to fold
i felt the rope shaking from this side to that side
so i turned and looked back and saw you trying to hide
i realized you were pulling me back, making it even harder to try
so i stopped trying to run i decided just fight it back or die
i pushed you back trying to get out of your sight
but you shoved me over the rope, i started praying for life
then you reached out for my hand trying to make things alright
i trusted you one last time, and you watched me fall thru the night
i hit the water like concrete; gasping for some air
waves crashing me against the rocks slamming me here to there
then you dove in swimming after me like you cared
and i tumbled down a waterfall, why cant this be a nightmare?
after the long drop everything became calm and smooth
and i attempted to get out the water but i was struggling to move
finally, i was washed onto a shore, all broken and bruised
i freelycrawled on the beach, and vaguely still saw an image of u
CAN I EVER ESCAPE YOUR PAINFUL PLEASURE?
OR AM I TRAPPED IN THIS ENDLESS TORTURE FOREVER?
thanks...